Thursday, January 24, 2013

Head Down, Keep Punching

Never, never, never
title the work before
it’s done,
it’ll doom you.

I just start
wherever I am
and go
but I don’t
look at the screen.

I look at the keys
and I keep typing.

If I look up
I’ll immediately get stuck
on the errors,
and the whether
it looks like
a poem.

Sometimes it’s a rant,
or a deathbed confession,
or an impossible seduction
but I don’t think about it.

Just keep that head down
and keep punching those keys.

To the outside world
it probably looks
like I’m having
brutal and angry
computer sex,
but I don’t care.

I just keep following,
giving the ideas free rein
because I know
they’ll take me
somewhere.

If I keep my mind
and my hands busy,
then my thoughts
can get out of the way

and I can keep dancing
and singing,
looking for the spotlight,

or maybe that cliff
to fling myself from
and then marvel
as I glide down
like a beautiful flying squirrel.

Finally
when I lose my steam,
I stop,
and look up
and wonder
what the hell
I was saying.

Now,
comes the rewrite.

[Written for #MeetingTheBar for www.dversepoets.com a warm place in the cold, cold internet.]

32 comments:

  1. hahaha....i feel you man...i just let it go as well...get it out or let it run out or run its course before i try to muck with it...the what the hell was i saying in the end made me laugh...sometimes...

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    1. Thanks, man - a chuckle is applause to me.

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  2. LOL... sex with the computer, maybe, but I picture a concert pianist...

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    1. I meant like cyber sex, not actual sex. On the other hand maybe I have sex like a concert pianist.

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  3. Hi Mosk. I have done the same thing sometime. Feels good; and sometimes there are lines that come that really surprise me and even sometimes awe me. I love the uncensored quality of this kind of writing in others (and in myself).

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    1. Thanks - I agree I love the surprise of what bubbles up.

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  4. ..I think if you close your eyes, that will help...;) and I agree about not titling before your write

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    1. I'd close my eyes, but I need to see the keyboard as I can't "touch type" - I can hunt and peck like a hurricane though.

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  5. Ha, yes, the title almost always comes after the piece has been written, in exactly the way you describe. Fabulous!

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    1. Thanks - proof as this is that my working title for this was "How I Write."

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  6. haha I can completely relate, love it- wonderfully witty, angry computer sex

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    1. Thanks, and your last five words here are a pretty good self-portrait, I'd say.

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  7. 'To the outside world
    it probably looks
    like I’m having
    brutal and angry
    computer sex,'

    Awesome, it's poetry that resembles rock climbing and probably an excellent philosophy. Whatever gets the words out.

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    1. Thanks and I love the rock climbing imagery.

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  8. Fantastic opener
    But never, never, never
    settle for a first write
    of obscure self-satisfaction
    go back and share the flow
    with rewrite and welcoming title
    as you have done here so very well.
    thank you

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    1. Thanks - I believe what Woody Allen sez that rewrites are infinitely easier than the first write.

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  9. i can do this on paper but the digital has me bluffed
    great poem

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    1. Thanks, lucychili! Doesn't matter *how* you do it, just do it! :)

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  10. Totally different to my approach which involves blank paper, pencils and an eraser and lots of pauses to consider word choices, line endings etc :-)

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    1. That's where the rewrite comes in! Thanks, Mosk

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  11. Love this! I definitely relate to thoughts coming easier when the mind and hands are busy!

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    1. Yes, don't just sit there thinking...do something! Thanks!

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  12. Thank you, Buddah! This felt like a short film of you actually writing a piece. I could see you, your shoulders scrunched a little, brow furrowed a bit, fingers flying over the keyboard. Really clear imagery.

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    1. Thanks for the kind comment - if I can get you to visualize what I'm writing then I've done ok.

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  13. Mosk, I love this and can totally relate. Sex with the computer. Ha!! You're like a technical Kerouac I love it. I still can't stop giggling about "A glad Amy" best thing I ever heard!!
    amy jo

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    1. Thanks Amy Jo- loved Kerouac's First Thought, Best Thought ethic. If I can get in touch with the subconscious, then I can get to something beyond my own ego - wouldn't that be great of me? Oops, there goes my ego. :) Mosk

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  14. You got it right, Bud! Just fly away at it and the flow sticks. Sometimes the inspiration line gets entangled with gaps in between. Of course that can be corrected by the rewrites. Nicely, Mosk!

    Hank

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  15. Anonymous6:23 PM

    Thank you for helping us! I signed up for an online writing workshop. What was I thinking?? I'll need to use your method before Sunday night . .. :) Great poem, poet friend! - deb

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  16. Once again great poem, Bravo. I like the pacing and flow and it expresses the writing process so well.

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  17. I LOLed at the end. Witty verse! :)

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  18. Oh, LOVE this, Mosk! So perfectly captured! And excellent advice too... that requires frequent repetition. :-)

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  19. Totally brilliant. And inspiring. I shall wild write today, my friend. THANK YOU.

    Love this, especially:

    "I’ll immediately get stuck
    on the errors,
    and the whether
    it looks like
    a poem."

    de


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