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Tuesday, February 05, 2013

Doubt Awakens

We meet in the fog,
cool and soft.

Lost in
embraces

and glances anew,

doubt awakens:

will I still be
beautiful
once the fog
lifts?


[Written for #OpenLinkNight @dversepoets.com - home for wayward internet poems. Written in the Soupy Sales Format (in 25 words or less).]

53 comments:

  1. Never doubt. Beauty resides within, and no fog can hide it. Great poem!

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    1. Thanks, I agree beauty resides within.

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  2. nice...i like this..has both..a good sense of humor but also the question that i think bothers all of us in specific moments

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    1. Thank you - yes, the trick is to be in the moment and no where else.

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  3. the fog makes it easier...i guess its all in the perspective they take...is it the person they love or...

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    1. I'll take any advantage the fog affords. Thanks, Bro.

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  4. I venture to guess even more so :) Down with doubt and you'll shine bright enough to chase the fog away. Love "Soupy Sales Format" by the way...sums up the last 20 years of my life! :D

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    1. There's always doubt, if you let it in. Thanks! Long Live Soupy!

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  5. ah, the longing in that last question, who could fail to feel it? ... love the unique way you expressed it here

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    1. Thank you- yes, self-doubt can be a killer.

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  6. Oh, this is lovely! And I think most people woud relate.

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    1. Thanks, I hope you related to it.

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  7. I have just been reading up about Soupy Sales. (Unknown to an Aussie like me.) Wow, what a man! But I didn't find any reference to the formula? Was that from his journalism days? Can you expand (briefly of course!)?

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    1. Hi - Soupy Sales was a comic, not a journalist. He used to ask his viewers to write in but only "in 25 words or less" which is what I've deemed as the Soupy Sales Format.

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  8. i want more... more of the doubt... more of the words... it's so well written and such an amazing thing told in such few words... totally pinning in on a superficial fear and hitting on the idea hiding in fog (perhaps being our true selves) ... in short, loved it, wanted more.

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    1. Thanks- I thought - no prob 25 words. It forces one to edit. The first draft was 36 words.

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  9. Lovely... and yes, I do hope so.

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  10. Anonymous5:10 PM

    I love short poems . .this one was perfect! :) Is a Soupy Sales poem just one with 25 words? Thank you, poet friend, for showing us how it's done!

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  11. Beautiful! And, I'm loving that format.

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    1. Thanks and I like it, if only because it forces tightness.

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  12. Wow so well said in so few words. And something we all wonder about at times!

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    1. I never stop questioning why people love me. Thanks.

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  13. And there is the other side of the coin.....playing the part of the devil's advocate.....will the other person still be beautiful once the fog lifts?

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    1. Thanks, and I agree. That insecurity cuts both ways.

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  14. Love the questions in this.... Even the unspoken ones :)

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    1. Thanks so much - unspoken questions are my favorites sometimes.

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    1. From the Queen of Fancy Writing Awesomeness, that *is* a compliment!

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  16. I think so what a nice way to meet someone. http://gatelesspassage.com/2013/02/02/reflections/

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    1. I agree - the fog is gorgeous. Thanks for the comment.

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  17. We all want to be appreciated...well spoken

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    1. Thanks, I know *I* need to be appreciated.

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  18. A universal cry, well done !

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  19. Of course you will be. No worries!

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  20. Reflections of a Sunday morning?

    CHeers,

    Martk Butkus

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    1. If your heart is in the right space, every morning is a Sunday morning. :) Thanks

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  21. More importantly: will you still be mysterious when the fog lifts? :) I like the ambiance in this.

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    1. Thanks, yeah, I'm some mystery, I am.

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  22. Soft and yet probing, into the insecurities we all have. i'm digging it, Mosk. i may just have to take up the 25-word-or-less challenge....

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  24. It's amazing how much visual texture you can put in so few words. I live in an area where most of the residents complain about foggy days, but I think they are so pretty. :)

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    1. I love the fog - it makes everything look soft and clean.

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