"These aren't poems. They're more like speeches from a movie that will never be made."
I love the pathos that exude from your lines, especially the first three. You used the three-two line composition structure brilliantly!
I like how the new poems never look back.
There ya go .... upward and onward!
Very nice! :) There is hope.
I love what your are saying here... Authenticity is the heart of poetry and not the form!
It's wonderful when poems ascend easily for the one you love
I love the way you have structured your tanka, the gap between the past love poems (poor old things, I feel sorry for them!) and the present ones – and the image of flying poems is simple but beautiful.
I like how the love poems ascend without looking back. The old perhaps tried too hard, or perhaps the love itself wasn't really there.
I would love to receive this love poem - lucky person!
Poems failing to fly made me smile ... happy weekend.
Simple yet profound...uplifting!
An object needs a subject.
Such a turn. From frayed darkness to burnished light. Beautiful!
I love the pathos that exude from your lines, especially the first three. You used the three-two line composition structure brilliantly!
ReplyDeleteI like how the new poems never look back.
ReplyDeleteThere ya go .... upward and onward!
ReplyDeleteVery nice! :) There is hope.
ReplyDeleteI love what your are saying here... Authenticity is the heart of poetry and not the form!
ReplyDeleteIt's wonderful when poems ascend easily for the one you love
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ReplyDeleteI love the way you have structured your tanka, the gap between the past love poems (poor old things, I feel sorry for them!) and the present ones – and the image of flying poems is simple but beautiful.
I like how the love poems ascend without looking back. The old perhaps tried too hard, or perhaps the love itself wasn't really there.
ReplyDeleteI would love to receive this love poem - lucky person!
ReplyDeletePoems failing to fly made me smile ... happy weekend.
ReplyDeleteSimple yet profound...uplifting!
ReplyDeleteAn object needs a subject.
ReplyDeleteSuch a turn. From frayed darkness to burnished light. Beautiful!
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