Tuesday, June 05, 2012

Floating Candy

The hummingbird
defied gravity,
and zipped up
beside my third floor
office window.

He was beautiful,
with a splash of red
in a smooth green wrapper,
like a piece of floating candy.

I thought,
“you’re so far away
from where you’re supposed to be,
50 feet high in the air,
searching in vain
for something resembling
sugary nectar.”

He looked at me,
and I’m sure
he was thinking
the very same thing
of me.

However,
where I looked upon him
with misunderstanding,
he looked upon me
with pity,

and then he
zoomed away.

(Submitted for #OpenLinkNight at http://dversepoets.com/ - my favorite poetry site on the internet.)

45 comments:

  1. ouch, gee thanks hummingbird...well it might not be sweets but at least you will eat...well penned man...hope work is not too hard on you today...

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    1. Thanks - work is never too hard, less stressful. And yes, I do eat, like a monster!

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  2. ha..love it...what an encounter..surely can make one think..and re-think...

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    1. Thanks Claudia, it was very curious seeing him floating there up against the office window - he revisits me often.

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  3. Birds make fine teachers, I have found. I hope you got on the other side of the glass eventually, dear Mosky, and found something sweet there.

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    1. Thanks Shay, I love birds, I can watch them for hours. I envy them at times. Yes, I can and do find something sweet wherever I am.

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  4. Whew. Man, this hits right in the gut, after all that beauty (this is gorgeous: "He was beautiful,
    with a splash of red
    in a smooth green wrapper")

    Beautiful work, my friend.
    Hey, I need you to do me a solid and point me in the direction of a "subscribe to BLOG by email" button on here, somewhere. I see the one for comments, and I've "Followed," but you don't come to my email inbox and that's right where I want ya. Holler back. De

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    1. Thanks for the kind words, de - just for you, look in the upper right corner, I've added the "Subscribe by email" box. I never thought to do that before!

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    2. Yay! You rock! Now I can keep up with you! :)

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  5. Well, this is lovely! The Humming bird seems to know more about life than we humans do. That it's meant to be lived and not existed in.
    Smart bird. I love humming birds, they are beautiful!
    We have them here and always so busy, busy, busy.
    Lovely piece from you :)

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    1. Thanks! Yes, but I think pretty much every form other than human knows more about us than we do!

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  6. Poignant, thought-provoking moment you have captured here, Mosk. Bless you.

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    1. Thanks Laurie, bless you too!

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  7. ah...one of the very reasons I keep my blinds closed...envy of the bird flying free.

    http://wp.me/p1ZKiY-1Bz

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    1. As Ian Hunter sings "I want to be the very first human to fly."

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  8. Lovely song, man, wonderfully capturing a rare moment for all of us to enjoy as you obviously did. I really enjoyed how you brought the moment to life. It's moments like these when we find that oneness with nature that elevates us to higher realms of consciousnesd.

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    1. Thank you - I'm so happy I didn't let the moment slip by.

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  9. Tasty poetry! So very delicious. I'm in sugar shock!! One of your best ever.

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    1. Thanks so much - here, have some insulin.

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  10. What resonates here is your close encounter and appreciation of another species. I firmly believe the universe conspires to remind us of our place in the order of things...This is a little jewel. Love it!

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    1. Thanks, and I agree that the universe put the humming bird there, and put your lovely compliment here.

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  11. This is a little jewel, and resonates cuz I love the close encounters we have at times with other species...Love this, Mosk!

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  12. Superb - this poem sings such a poignant song

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  13. Love it! Poignant and superb

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  14. So poignant - love this

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  15. I had five of the little suckers in my face last night while I was showing a house, and I KNOW they were laughing at me. Powerful write for me today...awesome!

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    1. Thanks Natasha! I would think hummingbirds are a selling point.

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  16. Good one, It's okay to search and go to most heights to achieve what we would like to succeed, in the most positive way

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  17. "However,
    where I looked upon him
    with misunderstanding,
    he looked upon me
    with pity,"

    Love the revelation in this stanza. It's tough when our "day jobs" hinder us from enjoying life that surrounds us, from being like that little bird, able to break away and explore at will. Wonderful capture here.

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    1. Thanks - I only assumed he pitied me. Maybe he just got bored and left.

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  18. Brudda dear,
    I can imagine the grind (because I did it for years!), the surprise of the hummingbird's appearance way up there... and that final exchange of thoughts, her looking at you with pity. Really puts things in perspective. She probably thought she was at the zoo! Love from your sistah, Ameleh
    http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/05/28/military-schooling-the-sunday-whirl/

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    1. I am in a zoo, with really lethargic animals. Thanks!

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  19. I bow down to your mastery of word, imagery and thought. I'm not worthy. This should be published somehow someway.

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    1. Thanks, and I've read your work too, and I'd say that I'm not worthy to read yours, but I do anyways. :)

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