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Tuesday, November 15, 2016

Charise

“The secret to
my happy marriage?

Once a week
I go to different
places like
Home Depot,
or Lowe's
or anywhere you see all those
Mexicans hanging
around the parking lot
looking for day-labor.

I look for the
most handsome,
cleanest looking
young man,
I don’t care
if he can speak English.

I tell him
I have some
light handyman work
for him to do
and we negotiate
a price.

He follows me back
to my place,
but before he gets
to work,
I ask him to wait.

Then I slip away
to the guest room
where I change into
lingerie,
something from
Victoria’s Secret
that shows off my legs
and my tits.

Then I call him
into the bedroom,
and I’m stretched out
on the bed
with an unmistakable smile.

You remember
that thrill of a new lover,
that feeling
of a young, hard body
on top of you,
warm muscles
and a strong throbbing,
hard and deep
inside you?

Well, I do,
because I get it
every week.

After he’s done,
I pay him
and he leaves.

Then,
when Randy comes home,
just before
he falls asleep,
I play a DVD
of the sex tape
I secretly made with
the day laborer,

and remind him

“This is for
fucking that
fat slut receptionist
in your office.”

One of these days,
I’ll tire of this
and forgive him.

Or not.”

33 comments:

  1. OMG. I'm so glad you waited all day until the right voice/story struck you. First of all, this is highly entertaining. But really, it's so much more than that. It's incredibly well-crafted. The line breaks, the controlled reading, the way you gradually revealed her intentions. This is definitely one of your best. (And I secretly love her for sticking it to him, just so. She's an artist.) Plus, I love her name. It's so close to "cherish," which really drives home the irony.

    P.S. I wouldn't care if he could speak English either. I miss being surrounded by people who speak Spanish fluently and often. I'm from Texas, and now I'm stuck in Alabama. :P All that culture, stripped away from me.

    Ooh, it's also "char eyes."

    Ouch:
    "or anywhere you see all those
    Mexicans hanging" ... Powerful line break.

    After that "unmistakable smile" line, I think you should add one that says "across my face." ... to add a couple more suggestions.

    Oh, and how hilarious to call her husband "Randy."

    I just enjoyed the ending again. Too funny, man. ... I can't wait to see what I get tomorrow!

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    1. Stuck in Alabama... ain't that a Bob Dylan Song" Stuck in Mobile Alabama with the Memphis Blues again"

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    2. I couldn't tell you. I'm not a Bob Dylan fan. Lyrics, yes. Tunes, no. I'll look it up, though.

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  2. Thank you so much. I'm not sure where this came from, but there's a sense of justice to this. Especially, I like the implication that she does this repeatedly, and he just had to take it, his guilt is that bad. Thanks again.

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    1. He he. That's what he gets. :P

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  3. Reading this I realize how "retentive" I've become... too mainstream. I need to release that beast! There's a true confessions quality that is intriguing for sure. A great read, Mosk!

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    1. Thanks, Walt. I don't know where this came from, but I like the sense of justice.

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  4. Damn BM - I'm inspired by this!

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    1. Thanks, and I hope I didn't inspire you to cheat on your partner, videotape it, etc.

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  5. This is a great read... Love the narrative, and somehow I think the revenge is the best way is revenge (or not)

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  6. Ha ha...payback is a mutha. I thought this was delightful.

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    1. Payback's a bitch and I wouldn't fuck with her.

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  7. The lady has guts plus she has some fun, smiles ~

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    1. Right - guts, but also she's a little unsafe!

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  8. Story with a twist! Nicely done!

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    1. Thanks, and that's what she said.

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  9. Gayle Walters Rose5:59 PM

    Ha...this is great! I think she's getting a lot more than justice!

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  10. I so enjoyed this and it belies the saying, revenge is a dish beast served cold...hot and the hotter the better it is.

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    1. Yes, the hotter the better.

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  11. Well, this has lots of spiciness! I was surprised at first at the first person narrative (a woman) but it so works - You did quite well with vindictiveness and vendetta!

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    1. Thanks, yes its a stretch because I'm so naturally masculine.

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  12. Revenge is an ice cold drink on a steamy day in August. Really liked this.

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  13. Peek-a-boo, Papi. ;)

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  14. Haha, a little like biting off your nose to spite your face but, ouch, Randy, that had to hurt (plus I like the pun on Randy's name)

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    1. Yes, I'm sure Randy had blue balls and broken heart.

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  15. Revenge is sweet, especially if with benefits!
    Kind regards
    Anna :o]

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    1. That's funny... revenge with benefits!

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  16. Powerfully written and so desperately sad. Revenge corrodes our soul because it turns us into that which has hurt and enraged us.

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    1. Right - I agree. But Charise is obviously hurting.

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