in the early spring
twilight,
my adult daughter
and I.
Later
I opined,
"This is
quality time:
me talking to you
and you texting
on your phone."
In spite of
her treatment-resistant
depression,
she smiled
said "Yup,"
yielding
a drizzle of laughter.
[posted for https://dversepoets.com/2017/04/10/quadrille-30/]
You have introduced me to the fine art of vaping! I, too, have discovered it's necessary to text to communicate with the younger generation!
ReplyDeleteWow! Straight to the heart of this current matter. Well drawn picture.
ReplyDeleteMany layers to this but I think you've said a lot in 44 words. Love the idea of "a drizzle of laughter".
ReplyDeleteI guess it depends...is it you she's texting?
ReplyDeleteThe texting is familiar - not the vaping!
ReplyDeleteQuality is relative. ;-)
ReplyDeleteLove it! (Maybe try texting her while she sits beside you next time. LOL!)
ReplyDeleteI so wish these young ones do away with their poems but we managed somehow ~ Love your response- drizzle of laughter, Mosk ~
ReplyDeleteAt least she smiled and later laughed.
ReplyDeleteThis is a really wonderful little vignette that is whimsical but says so much more than first the eye meets.
ReplyDeleteQuality time with adult children can be hard to come by.
ReplyDeleteSo modern and at the same time so poetically touching. I felt the dew drops.
ReplyDeleteThis is real life n 44 words.. fantastic.
ReplyDelete"yielding
ReplyDeletea drizzle of laughter."
That is so awesome. :)
Is this supposed to be as melancholy as it makes me feel, Mosk? You do win for best use of drizzle though.
ReplyDeletePrecious drizzle of laughter...you made a connection!
ReplyDeleteThis seems kind of sweet to me. A meaningful moment that maybe appeared to be unmeaningful at first.
ReplyDeleteI loved that idea and the poem...loved the drizzle of laughter!
ReplyDeleteit's those moments, yes, that we hope for. ~
ReplyDeleteThis moment feels very real and for that I like this poem very much ...'drizzle of laughter' works so well.
ReplyDeleteNIce moment caught, and great use of 'drizzle'.
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