"These aren't poems. They're more like speeches from a movie that will never be made."
I love the pathos that exude from your lines, especially the first three. You used the three-two line composition structure brilliantly!
I like how the new poems never look back.
There ya go .... upward and onward!
Very nice! :) There is hope.
I love what your are saying here... Authenticity is the heart of poetry and not the form!
It's wonderful when poems ascend easily for the one you love
I love the way you have structured your tanka, the gap between the past love poems (poor old things, I feel sorry for them!) and the present ones – and the image of flying poems is simple but beautiful.
I like how the love poems ascend without looking back. The old perhaps tried too hard, or perhaps the love itself wasn't really there.
I would love to receive this love poem - lucky person!
Poems failing to fly made me smile ... happy weekend.
Simple yet profound...uplifting!
An object needs a subject.
Such a turn. From frayed darkness to burnished light. Beautiful!