where the prayer goes
after it’s released.
Still
I find myself
searching for a place
outside
of my ego
to send
my thanks
and modest petitions.
When the smoke
clears away,
at the end of play
at the end of the day,
I pray,
and take my place
among the strivers,
the jivers,
the connivers,
the late arrivers,
and the stay alivers.
Yeah, I'm looking too - can't help it. This is a thoughtful one, and a treat, Mosk.
ReplyDeleteWow...the way you closed causes me to hear the many murmurers of the uncountable prayers pulsing the cosmos...I like the way you start with you and expand...excellent.
ReplyDeleteAs one forever with one foot out of the bottle I pray day and night for grace and for gratitude without ever knowing who's on the other side of the line -- and yeah, it's get in line, buddy, with all of those words -- there is a humility in understanding we're not alone in our lonely hour of needs. Amen.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you have worked with sounds and words.
ReplyDeleteLOVE THIS. Love! Modest petitions. Is it too much to ask? Sometimes you're the striver, sometimes the jiver, sometimes the happy-to-just-be-aliver. Just love this poem from beginning to end!
ReplyDeleteLove the humanity of this speaker... the spiritual wisdom that fills the poem.
ReplyDeletelast stanza rocks
ReplyDeleteI don't think we can know where our prayers go after they are released.....but we hope they get to the right place! Smiles.
ReplyDeleteI also have moments when I wonder where prayers go, if they will reach God's ears. We are human after all.
ReplyDeleteIt's simple and honest. I love how streamlined this is and the rhymes and repetitions. Really well done.
ReplyDeleteLately, I have been wishing that prayer was part of my belief system. I like the idea that it's none of my business what happens to prayer after it's released.
ReplyDeleteThis poem has such nice rhythm and great imagery. I see that prayer floating up in a balloon and then I come back down to the feeling of a ping-pong ball bouncing back and forth over each line. I really like it.
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